*** Warning ***
Sensitive situations
Violence; Nudity;
Hard R rating
Please do not read if you are easily disturbed
(All characters, places and events reside solely in my imagination.)
The Song of Gaál
.............. One ............
Cassava DelGado lived
within the walls of Castle Sotete most of his young life. At the
tender age of five, Cassava and two other children left the village
with Levente Tolvaj, Master of Castle Sotete. Levente had been
watching the children in the village below the castle for seven
years, since his marriage to Malika Katarina Gaál. Levente hoped he
would find a dark haired, dark eyed male child each time he
approached the village. This was no small task since the people of
the secluded, mountainous lands that surrounded Castle Sotete were
often fair haired and blue eyed. Levente would take a child
occasionally to service the castle and he would leave a gift for the
village in return, but he had yet to find the child he wanted.
Following a trip to the
neighboring county, Levente Tolvaj turned his horse down the narrow
path leading to the smallest village on his lands. He called out to
the elders as he approached and was greeted by a stoutly woman. A
small group of children cautiously followed behind the woman.
Levente nodded to the elderly woman, his glance never really touching
her, and he peered around her at the children.
At the sight of Cassava's
smudged face and bare feet, Levente's dour face split into a smile.
The smile did nothing to appease the nervousness of the children.
The curve of Levente's lips was more grimace than smile, set in a
ruddy face, partly obscured by lengthy, pale hair. The children
unwittingly took a step backward, seeing a vision from nightmares
before them. The village woman ushered the children forward for
inspection; she knew Levente had come to claim more children for the
castle. Joined by her elderly husband, the woman twisted her hands
together while the two men discussed the trade.
The deal sealed with the
promise of new livestock for the village, both elders turned their
faces from Levente, telling themselves that the gleam in Levente's
eye was reflection and nothing more. The village needed the two cows
promised by the Master of the Castle; they did no need the three
hungry children, especially so when one was not their own. 'They
will have fair lives at the castle,' the village elders assured each
other as they brushed gooseflesh from their arms. None glanced in
the direction of the dark castle that sat high on a hill. None
watched as the guardsmen swept up Cassava and the two other children.
None turned to wave farewell when the small group began their
journey to the castle. Not a sound was heard from the children.
Upon arrival to the castle, Levente Tolvaj dispatched the older village boy to the stables with the stable master and sent the small girl to the kitchens with a maidservant.
Cassava stood stiff and still, flanked by Levente's guardsmen, suffering Levente's glaring perusal. The frowning smile never left Levente's face and Cassava did his best to avoid looking directly at him.
Levente finally spoke, after what seemed an eternity to a five year old, 'Bathe him and take him to Mistress Tolvaj.' Levente ordered the burly guardsman standing behind Cassava. Levente decided that giving the boy to his eccentric wife would be an entertainment for her and he would have the boy close at hand. Chuckling to himself, Levente walked away, satisfied with the arrangement and applauding his own cleverness. What better guard for the boy than dear, little Malika?







This is off to such an intriguing start! I'm so happy you've finally decided to post it.
ReplyDeleteGreat job on the castle! And I'm eagerly looking forward to more.
Thanks so much :) Without your encouragement, this would still be just a story in my mind and in my notebook. ^_^ .... I am really happy with the castle. I wish I could show it floor by floor, room by room. Perhaps I will make a walk through video.
Delete~ Wow what a great start,I can not wait for more!
ReplyDelete~ I love it,& want more!(",)
Thank you :)
DeleteThis is a very interesting beginning! I can't wait to see what they have planned for the children!
ReplyDeleteI am glad you find it interesting :)
DeleteThank you for taking the time to read.
ohhhh wonder what they want with poor Cassava? Lavente to me is eerie and creepy, wife doesn't sound much better! Can't wait to see more=).
ReplyDeleteIt's a secret ^_^
DeleteI am glad you are interested, thank you.
Wow I wonder what they collect children for?! That is kinda scary the behavior of the townspeople to just LET the kids go with these people for a few cattle! Do they have any idea what happens in there I wonder? Even if one was not there's they have to be somewhat concerned still right?
ReplyDeleteI agree with Eden, Lavente is creepy!
Ignorance is bliss. The children are going to have a better life at the castle. That's what they comfort themselves with. I am happy that you read :) Any feedback is very appreciated.
DeleteOhhhhhh, very interesting. I want to see what happens.
ReplyDeleteThanks a bunch for reading my story. ^_^
DeleteThis has a very creepy vibe to it. Interesting and willing to see what happens next.
ReplyDeleteThank you for taking the time to read. :)
DeleteI love the intro. It definitely left me wanting to know more about why they needed a dark haired dark eyed child. Looking forward to reading more :)
ReplyDeleteThanks :)
DeleteAnd thank you for reading.
I like it. A very interesting start. Lokking forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Bria :)
DeleteOh, great start, really want to know what happens next. I wonder what I really wants to do with the boy. Going to the next chapter :)
ReplyDeleteI am so excited you are reading :)
DeleteOne of my favourite writers ^_^
Thank you. :)
Ooooo this is interesting
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DeleteWow, this is very intriguing! I'm looking forward to finding out what happens to Cassava now, and what's going on the castle that Levente needs to keep bringing in more hildren. And why specifically he was looking for a dark-haired one.
ReplyDeleteI am glad you find it interesting :)
DeleteThanks for reading!
I wonder what the significance of having a dark hair and dark eyed child is. The way you described Levente and his mannerisms was great. He and his wife are giving me bad vibes all around about their true intentions.
ReplyDeleteIt will all unfold.
DeleteThank you for having an interest in my little story :)
I appreciate your comments :) thanks :)
ok, you got me!! i'm reading on right now!
ReplyDeleteI hope you enjoy it :)
DeleteWow, this looks really intruiging! I'm definitely going to catch up. ^^ Is the story still ongoing? =D
ReplyDeleteHello. The story is still ongoing. I have not been though. heh... sorry for that and thank you for reading :)
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DeleteWow amazing story. I can't wait to see what is in story for the children
ReplyDeleteThank you :) I do hope you enjoy it. Thanks for reading :)
DeleteWow, such an amazing start! This looks like a really dark bedtime story, both creepy and endearing, that's an interesting combination... :-).
ReplyDeleteOh, and expect some random comments from me as I read on.
Thanks :)
DeleteA very mysterious start to the story. The elderly couple seemed to have knowledge of what the children might be used for, and the fact that they wanted to deny it to themselves makes it seem sinister. I love the setting for your story, and will be back to read more of what Levente has in mind for the boy.
ReplyDeleteThank you :) I am glad that you enjoyed it so far ^_^
DeleteThanks very much for reading and commenting, I appreciate that :)